Talk:The Tower/1

“Ile Herenga made it?!” Telayu asked with a sickened expression. “What is Ile Ngakara trying to do—kill us?” -- The second question doesn't follow from the first.

Otherwise, it's a really well written story. Very descriptive, making for a fulfilling reading. I should like to see a bit more of a connection between the previous chapter and this one, storyline-wise. So Sabrina now has a job as a dancer? Or are the others wanting her to start dancing to get to know her people's culture? Also, the dance was described as flowery in the previous chapter, and now it is described as snaky (or is that just me). Is it the same dance? I really thought that once she finished dancing the red orb was going to fall upon them again.

Abcxyzzzz 16:58, 24 March 2008 (UTC)