Talk:Annabeth's Adventure

Yay Welsh!

I mean, yes... So I'm not sure what comments the mainpage was asking for, but I'll give it a go.

In the epilogue Daltos sounds somewhat hurried, it'd be nice if he was slower and mysterious like the way Dumbledore was, although I guess since he's listing the people he'd be more along the lines of Father Christmas from Narnia, or lady Galadriel from The Lord of the Rings.

also when Zog said "Who's gonna make me!" he sounded kindof like a child or something. It helped enforce how Annabeth called him a jerk, but personally I like cold, dangerous, and more mature enemies, like Voldemort was in the end of the first book, (not Quirrel though, which kindof confuses the matter there). Also it might help him seem imposing, I mean if it takes two, three, or four people to take him down I imagine he's pretty powerful, and I imagine he should seem powerful? You might try switching it to just "make me" or something. Maybe make him like a hissing serpent, or ... No, I don't know.

(this is my first time commenting on someone elses work; sorry if I wasn't helpful)--Modred. (talk) 01:32, June 18, 2010 (UTC)