Talk:My Heart

I gave this a 2/5, and here's some constructive criticism (I hope):


 * I can sense that this poem was written to be erratic, to parallel the emotional state of the speaker. It's really hard to do this, primarily because it's so hard to tell where it's the author's intent and where it's simply a failure to make things flow smoothly.
 * Sometimes, words seem to be missing, or are replaced with other words, that disrupt understanding of the poem.
 * Sometimes phrases seem, at least to me, to be not meaningful.
 * There is a sense that the ending to the poem is not existent, as if there was another part of the sentence to be written; also note the lack of a final period.

21:17, 27 April 2007 (UTC)